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Trachers should assign students' seat and elicit students' independence. At that age, children often get hurt their feeling when they had some troubles with their friends. So teachers should make chidren safe at their school. In addition, teachers have to have an oppotunitiy to discuss about their seat location. It is worth discussing it because they can know how to find the summary of classroom discussion. In future, children will have an similar role like their teachers and think what is the best for children in their class. I believe that excellent teacher assign childrens' seat and give them an important chance




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I believe teachers should assign students’ seats, but also encourage students' independence. At a young age, children can easily get their feelings hurt if they have conflicts with classmates, so having teachers arrange the seats can help create a safe classroom environment. However, it's also important for teachers to involve students in discussions about seating, so that children learn how to express their opinions and understand the reasons behind such decisions. In the future, these students may play a similar role and think about what is best for others in their community. An excellent teacher assigns seats thoughtfully and gives students a chance to share their thoughts.




A1. "children often get hurt their feeling when they had some troubles with their friends."
⏩️ children can easily get their feelings hurt if they have conflicts with classmates
「get hurt their feeling」という表現は文法的に正しくなく、より自然な慣用句である「get their feelings hurt」に修正しました。感情を表す「feeling」は、この文脈では複数形の「feelings」が適切です。また、「had some troubles with their friends」を「have conflicts with classmates」に変更することで、よりフォーマルで的確な語彙を使用し、時制も現在の状況を表す「have」に修正しました。


A1. "So teachers should make chidren safe at their school."
⏩️ so having teachers arrange the seats can help create a safe classroom environment.
元の文では、単に「教師は生徒を安全にするべきだ」と述べていましたが、座席配置と安全な環境の関連性が不明瞭でした。改善された文では、「教師が座席を配置することが安全な教室環境を作るのに役立つ」と具体的に説明されており、座席配置が生徒の安全にどのように貢献するのかが明確になっています。これにより、主張の根拠がより強固になります。